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"you shut the hell up,"
she watches out the window, curious.

boys with colored sweat mold their fists
into slabs of ocean, beating on a boy with
straw-colored skin. she figures she knows
his parents—the brown-eyed, doe woman
who is probably abused and the husband
with the dark, thick hands.

she watches as his freckles are doused
in blood, a thick goopy wine-color while
their hands attempt to break skin, to
break this town.

the window is spattered with the remains
of insects and she watches them converge,
all at once, into a semi-circle around his
oval body, disjointed and married to the
ground. she hears tennis shoes and a
scream and she watches his hands turn
into a sun, splaying out five-fingered,
before wilting. not a sun, but a sunflower,
covered in blood like bees, the sweetest
flower alive.

she does not stop to see if his bone pops
out. she does not watch the sloppy saliva
escape their mouths with fervor. she lets
the blinds down when the boys leave on
broken-bottle skateboards, and the boy
twists into a fetal position, calling out
softly about the sky and birds and his
mother's soft, removing hands.

she can't glance at the phone; she can't
imagine calling his parents, "your son,
he's on the ground, a stew of blood that
may or may not be his, your fifteen-year-
old son with the arm that was cracked
all along like a fracture line, laying in
the middle of the road, calling for you."
she can't imagine their bodies, running,
falling in step next to him, clasping their
hands towards god and asking for a relief,
for a miracle.

her kids sit in the corner, at the kitchen
table, dressing a barbie in pastel colors
and turning papers into rainbows. they
are in their school uniforms, dappled and
sunny, hushed and giggly. the light peering
through the window brushes back their skin
like a father would, gently.

"mama?"
she turns her head, afraid.
©2008-2009 ~livingcomforteagle
:iconlivingcomforteagle:

Author's Comments

life burns up faster than flames to a photograph
a big stack of mishaps and so much time spent feeling bad
despite all the beauty that drips right off a loved one's lips
a childlike reaction that starts and stops with selfishness


today after school my dad had to go to the UPS store, and i was standing there while dad was filling out all these standard forms and this blond lady rushed in with two kids, who immediately went to the corner and started to color. and she kept gushing about this crowd of boys across the street who were in some kind of gang fight, and she couldn't stop talking and sputtering and she looked so harried, and she kept saying "i didn't know what to do so i just--i just drove right through them, why did my kids have to be right there, i mean where do they get off?" and after her tirade was finished they started to shout "mommy mommy we colored in the kitty from ice age!"

word count: 332
listening to: forever and a day - her space holiday
(c) LeeAnn - 2008

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:iconghost-of-ink:
Well done, especially the imagery. It painted a vivid picture, one that is growing all too common in this day and age. The commentary underneath also adds to the ignorance that's creeping into the world, turning heads and seeing with blind eyes.

:heart: Ghost
:icongarnet-43:
Very dark. Very frightening.

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"And the day came when the risk to remain tight in a bud was more painful than the risk it took to blossom." - Anais Nin
:iconcries-of-the-past:
That story is horrific.

Great poem also.

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:iconlivingcomforteagle:
thank you! :) i'm glad you liked the commentary especially.

--
dark pictures, thrones, the stones that pilgrims kiss,
poems that take a thousand years to die;
but ape the immortality of this
red label on a little butterfly.
-vladimir nabokov
:iconlivingcomforteagle:
dark's a good word for it :\

thank you :)

--
dark pictures, thrones, the stones that pilgrims kiss,
poems that take a thousand years to die;
but ape the immortality of this
red label on a little butterfly.
-vladimir nabokov
:iconlivingcomforteagle:
seriously. it was surreal, this woman.

thank you :)

--
dark pictures, thrones, the stones that pilgrims kiss,
poems that take a thousand years to die;
but ape the immortality of this
red label on a little butterfly.
-vladimir nabokov
:iconghost-of-ink:
I love reading the artists' comments, because they normally have helpful clues or extra prose. :lol:

Oh, and you're welcome. :)
:icononyxdemoness:
I - I -

*wants so badly to rant*

This is what pisses me off about people in general. I don't care if you have the fucking Pope in the car with you, about to be assassinated if you don't keep moving, there is no excuse for doing nothing when there's something like that happening, especially when it's right in front of your face. It's bad enough when people feel they can ignore tragedies and war and horrible, brutal acts just because they're on the other side of the world and have no direct impact on them (this also pisses me off) but this? Just plain horrible.

/ranty mcrantpants

Anyway, poem critique. As someone has already said, this is lovely vivid imagery, and again as someone has said, very dark. (I so totally have no thoughts of my own today. :dead::zombie:) Um, original thought, original thought... Again, I love the way you describe things. The picture you paint and the contrasts you draw are wonderful.

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Your heart is a muscle the size of your fist. Keep loving, keep fighting.
:iconcynicalxpoet:
Your poetry always needs to be read twice.

thick goopy wine-color
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This was the only line that bothered me. I feel like it's an overload of adjectives.
:iconjamestalbertkirk:
it was interesting....not my favorite of your work, but still great, and much better than anything i can do :D

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I cannot run from my family.
They're hiding inside of me.
Don't change my life.
Help me if you might but don't tell my family.
They'd never forgive me.
They'd say that I'm crazy.
But they would say anything if it would shut me up.

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