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My fingers slink off like baby slugs. My nails are left, clamped like bark to a birch in a dying March winter. The air is wine.

My feet are hollow, stubby chins, my eyes dangle off like earrings, without sparkle or diamond for redemption: my lips are swollen, thrown-up pieces of lung strewn over my face. I breathe outside myself.

Your hair is pretty.

my toes are

my thummbbbbb


my



I think you are the only warrior, the only poet, the only murderer I know who smells like that.





our legs are wrapped in sheets like wounded and sore babies out of a womb that

our legarms
our


i have folds of skin in my palms, in the soles of my, in my, my me, i love




Let's have some babies.
:iconlivingcomforteagle:
i didn't know whether this was humor or romantic or philosophic or perspectives or horror or what.



leave me alone. >>;

word count: 131
listening to: maybe angels - sheryl crow
(c) LeeAnn - 2007
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:iconnuzai:
I don't mean to be rude but
how the hell do you write like that?

Being fourteen and all...I'm fourteen too...and I've never met anyone who can write like that.
Are you insane? Cuz geniusus have to be insane, you know.
Ah well. I'm slowly going through your gallery x]
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:iconlivingcomforteagle:
...i hate to mention this, but i was technically thirteen when this was written--i didn't turn fourteen until a month and two days later.

thank you so much, as well! :hug: you are too kind!
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:iconnuzai:
Ahaha that's crazy XD

Love it, keep working =]
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:iconnuzai:
crap I forgot to end the italicizing after anyone
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:iconbblk:
I think it's humour. It's all serious, but then the last line is read, and it's like hehee..

Favourite line: The air is wine.

I love how you make everything real. The words jump off the screen. Everything has a colour or smell or something. I love it all. :heart::glomp:
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:iconlivingcomforteagle:
i considered humor, really seriously considered it, and then i switched over to romantic at the last second.
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:iconrchelsea2005:
~rchelsea2005 Dec 2, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
It was odd...slightly unsettling (in a good way), and the end was very...very random.

Overrall...it leaves me confused and contemplative. I suppose there are many poems that do that...
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:iconlivingcomforteagle:
this was definitely a strange one >>;

thank you! ..i think!
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:icononewithdarkness:
god all mighty, macabre if anything

the piece. oozes it, subtly then pours it out in decadent reams.

very good, the portion at the top, the syntax and movement really captures attention well
thought provoking and manipulative.

excellent job.
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